The captain Captain Obvious
“I take the liberty of sending you my letter of application. “
“I am currently looking for a job. “
The reaction of the recruiters: “Oh? “May think ironically whoever reads you. To begin this way is to almost say, “I am writing you a letter.” Of course, the recruiter understood that.
What to do: It is better to delete this mention and move on. Or say a lot more. For example, say that we are on active standby to find the job that fits perfectly with this or that criterion.
The CV hook
“I already have a very long experience, job, missions and various positions. “
«Holder of a master 2 in management management specialist in human resources, …»
The reaction of the recruiters: “If the first sentence is a repetition of the CV, it is a waste of time, clearly,” slice Philippe Combes. A cover letter must be short: about 15 lines.
What to do: If you feel the need to clarify certain points of your career, for example, if you are in reconversion, it is better to do it subtly in the second paragraph, rather than scare the recruiter as soon as possible. grip.
The “Fan of” hitch
“Your company wants to grow by controlling its financial and accounting flows. “
“You are a family business that promotes personal development. “
The reaction of the recruiters: “Talking about the company is good. Giving details of one’s financial health or values is risky, “explains Guillaume Blanchin. First, because it’s often boat. Then, because we take the risk of not being up to date in the information, and therefore to be completely off topic.
What to do: Avoid generalities and be sure of your shot. If the company really has a different project than its competitors or original values, you can mention it. But make sure the truth of the facts by contacting one of his employees, for example.
The political hook
“Sunday work is a debate. For my part, I’m not afraid to come to the office on weekends and holidays because productivity does not wait. “
The reaction of recruiters: “The presentations on the 35 hours or the Minister of Economy, we see, even if it is very marginal, says Guillaume Blanchin. It is extremely dangerous. “
What to do: Keep your political opinions to yourself. These topics are too divisive to be mentioned in a letter or job interview.
The philosophical catchphrase
“Undertaking is daring to take risks and continually expand your comfort zone to achieve your goals. “
“Believing in something and not living it is dishonest,” said Gandhi. “
The reaction of the recruiters: “It feels the phrase pumped somewhere,” notes Philippe Combes, dubious. Coaches, outplacement consultants, and trainers often give examples of out-of-the-box phrases, such as “Expand your comfort zone,” and candidates often pick them up as they are. As a result, they are overused and impersonal. Ditto for the literary quote. Even in quotation marks, do not use it if you found it in a specialized dictionary. She does not say anything about you.
What to do: The quote is not totally forbidden, as long as it really speaks to you and you say why. And for the leitmotive, Philippe Combes believes that “we can be inspired by it but by writing it with its own words. When we have the person in interview, we want to find the personality of the letter, “he adds.
The hook (too) intimate
“My wife is a pharmacist in the Paris region and my mother lives in rue d’Alésia. “
“After divorcing after an infidelity, I need to bounce back from scratch. “
The reaction of the recruiters: “And if not, the post, it interests him? That’s right, our search criteria for a job are often very much related to our personal lives. But the recruiter does not need to know as much. Your love life, a serious illness, or the complete story of your family, from the first sentence of a letter, is embarrassing and it will not help you get an interview.
What to do: In some cases, your personal life deserves to be mentioned. If you are applying for a position at the other end of France, you can say that your personal life leads you to want to move, but by avoiding to say too much and by bringing it like a second criterion of motivation, after the job content.
The hangman misspelling
“In response to your television ad …”
“Your business matches …”
The reaction of the recruiters: Oops. Eliminated. The mistakes of style and misspellings are crippling. No need to say more, though?
What to do: Re-read, reread. Re-read.
The grip of despair
“You may be about to read the tenth job of the day … And without knowing it you are also the most important person in my career. Indeed, you will decide to put this letter to the cart or to continue until the end, which will bring you to grant me an interview. “
“Let me send you this letter, it has been eight years since I contacted institutions like yours, to propose my collaboration. “
“I do not have any significant financial ambition. “
The reaction of the recruiters: “To say that one is ready to accept everything is counterproductive,” laments Philippe Combes. A job search is difficult for everyone, you will not stand out by writing it in black and white. Even if the recruiter has mercy on you, he will not hire you for it.
What’s Better: Plan for the job you want, rather than thinking about where you are now. Talk to your friends about your difficulties to keep only the positive for the recruiter. Courage.
The hitch too-much
“I have the honor to come here to solicit your high kindness, to grant me a job in your honorable establishment that you see fit to my skills. “
The reaction of recruiters: “It hangs because we talk about it years after”, fun Philippe Combes, who found this letter of 2006. But that’s not enough to get an interview.
What to do: Do not try to mark the spirits by the form, but by the bottom.
Other details that kill when the email opens
> An e-mail address or skype that we had created in high school, type loulouchou75
Tip: create a real address and forward your emails.
> A mailing address at the other end of the country
Tip: do not put a mailing address at all.
> The mail written in Comic Sans MS
Tip: forget this font, forever.
> The smileys that jump to the eyes
Tip: keep the fun for people we know.